Monday 23 November 2015

The Neverland Story by Emma Re

WALHT share our free writing on our hub blog.
We were to take our free writing in our books, and publish it on our device. We then needed to mark it against the blog rubric  to see if would make a good blog post.  We were then able to publish to the blog.



The Neverland story by Emma Re
Once upon a time there lived a fairy named Pirella. She lived in Neverland. One day she went to Puppy Princess. Puppy Princess lived in a castle. It was as big as the world. Pirella was delivering an old sink, but the princess didn't want it. The guards took the sink back to a wizard named Soup. He was a fixer upper. The wizard was happy to fix something, as he hadn’t been able to fix anything for a hundred years! It was fixed on Monday. Puppy was happy to get her sink fixed so she gave it to Pirella for her eighth birthday. Pirella loved the sink and she remembered that it was the sink she delivered. She said thank you to everybody. And THAT MADE THEIR DAY!!!


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7 comments:

  1. Hi Emma your story is very cool! I like the detail that you used. If I could change anything I would change nothing. WELL DONE EMMA!

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  2. Hi Emma, I liked the end of your story because it had a happy ending.

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  3. Hi Emma, I liked your story and your great use of punctuation. How did you feel when you shared your story to your reading group? I thought you were very brave.

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  4. Hi Emma re youer story about The Neverland story rimis me of this tv show called jake and the nevery land pirits. my favit carda is the Puppy Princess. the Puppy Princess is my favit bit beuse it sonds very cut.

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  5. Hi Emma I liked how you made your story about make their day. I think you could add some more detail.

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  6. Kia ora Emma Re, I liked your story because it was about make their day.

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  7. Hello Emma, Emma that was a fantastic story and I even liked that it rellated to make their day.

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